The draft and the suggestions look very good. Allow me to give you my take, to introduce a slightly different angle.
I think that both the draft could be sent like itās worded and each of the suggestions is worth being included.
I was thinking about including the NSR holders into the introduction as you speak on behalf of them as well. But I think that does sound too much like selling something (which you try, but without the NSR holders it sounds less so 
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Iām hesitant about mentioning the Android wallet. Basically itās a competitor of iPay, VISA payWave and the likes. Itās not as widely distributed as the latter ones are, but compared to them using NuBits is cheap and without the hassle of back charges.
The Android wallet is in a great position, but currently lacks distribution.
Thatās a good pars pro toto of the chicken and egg problem NuBits are inā¦
ā¦I think it should be in the text.
Hereās my take.
The first part is important - you canāt rely on Bitcoinās value. If people were hoarding more and more and you could rely on that, the price would rather go north than change a great deal from day to day.
Bitcoinās liquidity is high, but so is the volatility.
With NuBits only the liquidity is high; volatility compared to USD is 0.
What about
I donāt know whether it would be beneficial to add what Iāve inserted in bold letters.
I donāt know whether that pulls attraction to the fact that a system like NuBits can be under heavy load. I prefer adding it, because even if you hadnāt thought of it before, you see the scenario and learn that this doesnāt impact the reliability of NuBits if thereās heavy load.
I like the rephrasing by @Nagalim very much, but allow me to play the grammar nazi - I donāt want this tiny correction not to be included in the letter.
In difference to @mhps Iād rather focus on Nuās capability to support daily trading volumes in the millions as it already has shown in its past.
While thatās important if one tries to understand how NSR are tied to NBT and that the market capitalization is important to be able to keep the peg, itās nothing for the first contact.
What about
While this might not be true for every single day, most days it is - by far.
This is what PEGs should be more interested in than the market cap.
I second that the next one is important (at least imho). One of the attributes thatās liked at LTC and DOGE.
Before I write more about bits and pieces, hereās a version with all updates Iād make (Iāve changed $1.00 US to 1.00 USD). It looks like Iāve completely written it; yet itās just an altered draft.
